32 thoughts on “leap…Haiku

  1. Chagall says:

    Nice! One never knows! 🙂 —–Chagall

  2. Oloriel says:

    Leap! What a wonderfull message! Some of the best things we learn come from us daring to try and grab them.

    • yes, absolutely!
      Oloriel, i wouldn’t be writing poetry if i didn’t
      swallow every fear i had and just taken that leap in April.

      i’ve always taken leaps, and not everything is sucessful,
      but i guess this is sort a mantra for me.

  3. An intriguing bunch of words. And the professor agrees wholeheartedly!

    • hi farfetchedfriends, yes it always seems to be a challenge when we’re fearful,
      i can’t tell you how many times i’ve been there myself. but in the end, i think
      it’s my responsibility as an artist, that dictates my decisions to take the risk.

  4. annotating60 says:

    WT I had to think about your turn of phrase with unfamiliar. It is actually very good, the way our unknown self is really a familiar but one whom we do not see very often.>KB

    • ..there are multiple layers to this Haiku, KB..
      ty for finding this one. ..i changed one word
      last night and it finally said all that i wanted…
      i substituted ‘your’ for ‘the’, and that’s why
      i love this form so much…one word alters everything.

      • annotating60 says:

        My feeling about haiku, the way its used most times, I guess it is an American thing, is that sense of open endedness one gets when reading a Japanese haiku. That would be something that I would explore if I were writing them. But I don’t mean that as a criticism of your woirk. But you seem to touch on that a bit in what you write and seem to be thoughtful enough that you might explore that side of it a bit more. On another note are you doing a Friday prose tomorrow? >KB

      • it’s ok, i don’t take it as a criticism, though i have been doing some reading on the history
        of the form so writing according to the strict definition is a possibility. but right now i’m
        immersing myself in the syllabic rhythms, it’s become intuitive now and i think that’s important
        if i were to adhere to the discipline eventually.

        yes, and ty for asking KB. the story isn’t based in Brooklyn though, it’s when i was younger
        living on LI but pretty unique nonetheless.

      • annotating60 says:

        Looking forward to it.>KB

  5. Noora says:

    What a great advice and wonderfully composed haiku! Wow. Great job, my friend.

  6. SirenaTales says:

    Spare and lovely and wise. I love how the layers of meaning spiral…or they do for me, anyway, and I adore that circular movement. Thank you for the inspiration. Leap? Yeah, baby! xo

    • oh Sirena, i read your comment while i was parked and had the windows down,
      and when i read ‘Yeah Baby!’ i let out a big involuntary laugh…got a lot of
      quizzical looks from passerby.

      and i have to ty for the same, like i wrote on your post last night, after
      reading your words i changed 2 of mine and i think it made all the difference!

    • good afternoon Sheri, and no it doesn’t.
      this form, these 17 syllables and the 5, 7, 5 rhythm
      contain some universal mystery, it’s something i’m
      exploring as i read about the history of this poetry form.

      ty for your always thought provoking comments, they mean a lot to me.

  7. dawnhosking says:

    Will do 😉

  8. ego-free elliptical verse! Sort of your Tao.

  9. Chess says:

    …like writing a poem.

    • ah yes, precisely! and you found another layer in this Haiku,
      and it’s why i so love this form. there is something very special,
      maybe timeles, contained in this 5, 7, 5 rhythm and 17 syllable count.

      • Chess says:

        I thought it would be difficult to master haiku but now it seems to come more naturally. it seems to just flow out once i get the first line down. This morning I found myself editing a poem for brevity because it seemed so long and wordy when I reread it. But coming up with a first line remains a bitch. I seem to get stuck at the beginning quite a bit.

      • i’m happy to hear that the words are beginning to flow, Chess,
        the more you immerse yourself in this form, the more intuitive
        the 5, 7, 5 rhythm will become, you’ll begin to see it everywhere!

        very often, my Haiku begin with the second line, which is usually
        the essence of the poem. sometimes it’s the third line that appears
        in my head first, so if you get stuck, maybe that’s an option for you.

        please, keep at it and you’ll be rewarded, i promise.
        your Haiku are very tender and the form seems to suit you well.

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